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<div class="draft-block draft--p left">先前提到學術英語寫作的作業，為自己選一個專有名詞進行定義。我從王梓沅老師得到的回饋有兩點。</div>
<div class="draft-block draft--p left">內文：Effective population size (Ne) is defined as a measure of genetic diversity, reflecting the transmission dynamics of pathogens. Incidence cases associated with diverse strains of pathogens are challenging to control, resulting in a high Ne value. Conversely, a low diversity of pathogens within the incidence cases will yield a low Ne value, regardless of the total number of cases.</div>
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<div class="draft-block draft--p left">經過自己的補充與整理：</div>
<div class="draft-block draft--p left">1. Effective population size (Ne) is defined as a measure of genetic diversity "that reflects" the transmission dynamics of pathogens.</div>
<div class="draft-block draft--p left">(1) 降低 Ambiguity。Ambiguity 除了詞不達意，還有範圍不明的意思，比如 people 就是一個不太好的詞，並沒有明確給一個受眾範圍。</div>
<div class="draft-block draft--p left">that reflects 表示是先行詞 diversity 在 reflect；我原本用 reflecting 會無法知道是前面一整句話的補充說明，還是單純去掉關代把動詞變Ving。</div>
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<div class="draft-block draft--p left">(2) 在 S+V, Ving 的句型中，S+V 太短的時候，都可以想辦法改成直述句。</div>
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<div class="draft-block draft--p left">2. When incidence cases involve a wide variety of pathogen strains, control becomes more challenging, leading to a high Ne value. </div>
<div class="draft-block draft--p left">(1) 在我的原句 be associated with 是「有關連」的意思，很像 be related to；然而，associated with 有「被什麼引起而有關聯」，若不是被什麼引起而有關連的話，並不適合使用associated with。也就是說，associated with 必須用在更特定、更具因果關係的地方。</div>
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<div class="draft-block draft--p left">(2) 原句的are challenging to control 值得玩味。是誰在control? 並不是主詞 Incidence cases。這句話很難界定去 control 的主體是誰，所以必須要改寫，把 control 做為主詞接到challenging 的狀態。</div>

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