大作文精析-犯罪類(CRI29)-害怕犯罪不出門

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【大作文精析】-犯罪类(CRI29)-害怕犯罪不出门

【题目】

Many people are afraid to leave home because of crimes. Some believe that more actions should be taken to prevent crimes, but others feel little can be done. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

(此题选自Lee老师独家超20万字写作题库-犯罪类-第CRI29号题目)

【题目翻译】

很多人害怕出门,因为他们害怕犯罪。一些人认为我们应该采取更多的行动来预防犯罪,而 另外一些人觉得可以做的事不多。双边讨论并给出你的观点。

【题目解析】

此题考查的是话题中的犯罪类,考点为如何预防犯罪,常见预防犯罪的手段有:

1. Deter criminals through stiff sentences

2. Educate young offenders via vocational training

3. Increase police patrol and install CCTV

4. Enhance welfare system

此题比较难的是第二类人的态度,即要去证明几乎没有措施能够阻止犯罪,

1.政府不能 保障居民最基本的生活时

2.存在犯罪天性;

建议同学们能积累常见犯罪原因及预防 犯罪手段。犯罪类的话题在 2018 年一共考过三场,属于难度较大的话题。

【解题思路】

首先这篇文章我们可以采用四段式

开头段:背景句+话题引出+亮出观点

正文段一:能够防止犯罪的措施

正文段二:几乎没有措施能够阻止犯罪的理由

结尾段:观点+总结至少一个论点

PS:若论点过多也可展开多个段落

【确定论点】

能够防止犯罪的措施:

1. 政府加强立法,抑制犯罪的发生

2. 加强道德教育,提高公民的自我保护意识

3. 政府和媒体需要加强宣传

几乎没有措施能够阻止犯罪的理由:

1. 政府不能保障居民最基本的生活时

2. 存在犯罪天性

【高分话题词组补充-犯罪篇】

A deterrent effect 威慑作用

Escape punishment 逃避惩罚

Curb crime 遏制犯罪

Combat crime 打击犯罪

Commit a crime 犯罪

Violate laws 触犯

Serial killers 连环杀人犯

Juvenile offenders 青少年犯罪

Stiff sentence 严厉刑罚

Rehabilitation programs 改造计划

Habitual offenders 重犯

Reintegrate into society 重新进入社会

Correctional method 改造方法

【高分句型补充(可背诵)】

1. People seem to fail to take into account the fact that education does not end with graduation. 人们似乎忽视了教育不应该随着毕业而结束这一事实

2. An increasing number of people are beginning to realize that education is not complete with graduation. 越来越多的人开始意识到教育不能随着毕业而结束。

3. When it comes to education, the majority of people believe that education is a lifetime study.

说到教育,大部分人认为其是一个终生的学习。

4. A proper part-time job does not occupy student’s too much time. In fact it is unhealthy for them to spend all of time on their study. As an old saying goes: all work and no play makes Jack a dull boy.

一份适当的业余工作并不会占用学生太多时间,事实上,把全部的时间都用到学习上并不健 康,正如那句老话:只工作,不玩耍,聪明的孩子会变傻。

【范文】

With a rapid increase of crime, more citizens are scared of aggressive acts all over the world. As to whether more measures can be taken to stop crime, there is an endless debate. From my personal view, although more actions cannot fully guarantee the security of the whole society, it is not the reason for which people can surrender to violence.

Clearly, actions such as enacting more strict laws and legislations can effectively curb the frequency of crime. Fearing punishment is usually the nature of humans, so when they are informed of the consequence of committing crimes, they are more prone to stop doing anti-social acts. In addition, providing moral education contributes to raise people’ safety awareness and consequently prevents crime. As the Internet prevails, information about laws and legislations are more achievable, and thus there is a possibility that people are given more opportunities to learn how to distinguish right from wrong.

However, feasible measures are still not a panacea to the establishment of a completely safe society. If governments fail to guarantee a basic living standard for their citizens, crime rate will hardly be controlled. It is widely believed that a decent job and sufficient disposable income can reduce the possibility of committing socially unacceptable behaviour. The insecurity of society can also be attributed to the fact that it is less possible for governments to eradicate all factors leading to crime. Illegal drugs and alcohol are more accessible than before. People may have to commit crimes in order to get these items.

To conclude, reasonable actions including making severe policies and offering education are of great help to control criminal events. However, they may still not be able to ensure a secure living environment for people if fundamental needs of materials cannot be fulfilled.

【范文中的高分句子】

1. From my personal view, although more actions cannot fully guarantee the security of the whole society, it is not the reason for which people can surrender to violence. 解析:although 引导让步状语从句;fully guarantee 意为完全保障,尤其注意 fully 的使 用; it is not the reason for which...后接定语从句;surrender to 意为向...投降

2. Fearing punishment is usually the nature of humans, so when they are informed of the consequence of committing crimes, they are more prone to stop doing anti-social acts.

解析:fearing punishment 为动名词作主语的用法;so 表因果关系,平时作文中要稍注意逻 辑词的使用;be informed of 意为得知,听说;commit crimes 意为犯罪;be prone to do sth 意为倾向于做某事;anti-social acts 意为反社会行为。

3. As the Internet prevails, information about laws and legislations are more achievable, and thus there is a possibility that people are given more opportunities to learn how to distinguish right from wrong.

解析:prevail意为流行,盛行;achievable意为做的成的,可完成的;there is a possibility that...后接同位语从句;be given more opportunities to do sth 意为有更多的机会做 某事;distinguish right from wrong 意为明辨是非。

4. The insecurity of society can also be attributed to the fact that it is less possible for governments to eradicate all factors leading to crime.

解析:be attributed to 意为归咎于;the fact that...后接同位语从句;it is less possible for sb to do sth 意为对某人来说,做某事是不太可能的;eradicate 意为摧毁,完全根除。

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