〔重點三〕There is、There are、It is、These are太氾濫,請用更精準的動詞取代!
示範用一個動詞「repent」,瞬間將16個字的句子,縮短成5個字:
(X) It was not long before he was very sorry that he had said what he had.
(O) He soon repented his words. 他隨即對自己的話感到懊悔
〔重點五〕不要只會用and、but、so,或that、who、which、when來連接句子。
→ 這會讓文章讀起來很無聊,你應該更精確、簡潔的句構,讀者才會手不釋卷。比如:
(X) There is a general agreement among those who have enjoyed the experience that surf-riding is productive of great exhilaration.享受過衝浪的人一致認同,衝浪能製造許多興奮情緒
(O) All who have tried surf-riding agree that it is most exhilarating. 衝過浪的人都覺得很刺激