113學測英文佳作選（下）【AI輔助修稿測試】
概要
承繼上篇，將第二段落輸入ChatGPT生成改寫過、具有基本文章結構的短文；按照上篇的步驟，將生成50-60字左右的短文，並與上一段落結合而成約120字的作文。
原文
原文逐字稿[1]
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I *aspire the robot helper to obtain the following two functions: [number one,] producing positive words and [, number two,] appreciation *diary. First, when teenagers are anxious about their *character in the society or even simply their appearance, the robot helper can *mitigate their insecurity by giving teenagers analysis on how they are as a person. By reading the positive words about themselves, teenagers can build confidence and hence feel less anxious about what people think though *self discovery. Second, appreciation diary is a feasible way to bring teenagers’ focus back to themselves and their lives. Instead of worrying about how others scrutinize their behavior, observing their own life in detail is more effective and beneficial to *personal development. Appreciation diary requires *users to fill in three things *that they are pleasant or delightful through the day. During the process of *recalling the day, teenagers can concentrate on their feelings and emotions, *rise *self awareness, and gradually establish a self-oriented life. As mentioned above, a helpful robot helper should be *equipped with an ability to produce positive words and *a installation of appreciation diary to *assit teenagers with their *over attention on caring what others think. [196字]
AI處理
步驟一：概述段落
具體步驟：
輸入「整理原文／概括原文」(Can you summarize the passage)
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將原文輸入
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輸出成果，
如下：
The robot helper should have two key functions: generating positive words and maintaining an appreciation diary. First, it helps teenagers build confidence and reduce anxiety about their appearance or social roles by providing positive analysis about themselves, promoting self-discovery. Second, the appreciation diary shifts their focus from external judgment to self-reflection by encouraging them to list three positive aspects of their day. This practice enhances self-awareness and personal development. Overall, the robot aims to assist teenagers in overcoming excessive concern about others' opinions. [83字]
◎ 簡評：生成段落的主題句(Topic sentence)不夠簡練，重新提取。
輸入「只要主概念」(main idea only)
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輸出成果：
The robot helper supports teenagers' confidence and self-awareness by generating positive words and encouraging self-reflection through an appreciation diary.
步驟二：重寫段落
具體步驟：
請AI重寫原文(Can you rewrite the passage?)
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輸出成果，
如下：
I envision the robot helper with two essential functions: generating positive affirmations and maintaining an appreciation diary. First, when teenagers feel insecure about their identity or appearance, the robot can provide personalized positive insights to boost their confidence and reduce anxiety through self-discovery. By reading encouraging words about themselves, they can develop a healthier self-image. Second, the appreciation diary helps shift their focus from external validation to self-reflection. Instead of worrying about how others perceive them, teenagers will be encouraged to observe and appreciate their own daily experiences. By recording three positive moments each day, they can enhance self-awareness and foster personal growth. In summary, a well-designed robot helper should include both positive affirmations and an appreciation diary to support teenagers in overcoming excessive concern about others’ opinions.
步驟三：切割論點
具體步驟：
請AI將段落分斷成數個主要論點(Can you break [down] this passage into several key points)：
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輸出成果，
如下：
Two Main Functions of the Robot Helper:
- Generating positive affirmations
- Maintaining an appreciation diary
Boosting Confidence Through Positive Words:
- Helps teenagers reduce insecurity about identity and appearance
- Provides personalized positive insights
- Encourages self-discovery and builds a healthier self-image
Encouraging Self-Reflection with an Appreciation Diary:
- Shifts focus from external validation to personal growth
- Promotes mindfulness by recording three positive moments daily
- Enhances self-awareness and emotional well-being
Overall Goal:
- Supports teenagers in overcoming excessive concern about others’ opinions
- Encourages confidence, self-discovery, and a self-oriented mindset
步驟四：結合重點，重寫段落
具體步驟：
請AI用上述的主要論點重寫段落(Can you rewrite the passage, incorporating the key points above?)
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輸出成果，
如下：
The robot helper should have two essential functions: generating positive affirmations and maintaining an appreciation diary. First, by providing personalized positive insights, the robot can help teenagers build confidence and reduce insecurity about their identity and appearance. Reading affirmations about themselves encourages self-discovery and fosters a healthier self-image. Second, the appreciation diary shifts teenagers’ focus from external validation to self-reflection. By recording three positive moments each day, they can become more mindful of their own experiences, enhance self-awareness, and promote emotional well-being. Overall, the robot aims to support teenagers in overcoming excessive concern about others' opinions. By encouraging confidence, self-discovery, and personal growth, it helps them develop a more self-oriented and positive mindset. [113字]
步驟五：簡化輸出
具體步驟：
請AI縮短(make it shorter)
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輸出成果，
如下：
The robot helper should have two key functions: generating positive affirmations and maintaining an appreciation diary. By providing personalized insights, it helps teenagers build confidence and reduce insecurity. The appreciation diary shifts their focus from external validation to self-reflection, enhancing self-awareness and emotional well-being. Overall, the robot fosters confidence, self-discovery, and a positive mindset. [54字]
兩段結合
My robot helper’s main goal is to reduce teenagers’ excessive concern about others’ opinions. (1) Appearance anxiety often stems from insecurity about (2) peer perception, making (3) self-doubt (4) overwhelming. (5) Fear of rejection also pushes teenagers to (6) conform, (7) sacrificing their uniqueness and creating a (8) monotonous society. Worse, this pressure can fuel (9) mob mentality and bullying. By (10) addressing this issue, my robot helper can promote confidence, individuality, and a more (11) diverse social environment.
The robot helper should have two key functions: generating (12) positive affirmations and maintaining an appreciation diary. By providing (13) personalized insights, it helps teenagers build confidence and reduce insecurity. The appreciation diary (14) shifts their focus from (15) external validation to (16) self-reflection, enhancing (17) self-awareness and (18) emotional well-being. Overall, the robot (19) fosters confidence, self-discovery, and a positive (20) mindset. [122字]
單字註解
(1). Appearance anxiety 面容焦慮
(2). peer perception 同儕目光
(3). self-doubt 自我懷疑
(4). Overwhelming (adj.) 超出負荷
(5). Fear of rejection 被拒絕／否定的恐懼
(6). Conform (v.) 從眾
(7). Sacrifice (v.) 犧牲
(8). Monotonous (adj.) 單調的
(9). mob mentality 群眾心理
(10). address this issue; address (v.) 處置／對待（該議題）
(11). Diverse (adj.) 分眾不同；多元的
(12). positive affirmations 正面的認可→亦即「正向回饋」
(13). personalized insights 個人化的見解；個性分析；人格評鑑
(14). Shift their focus 轉移焦點；轉移注意力
(15). external validation 外人的認可；external (adj.) 外部（在）的；validation (n.) （世人的）認可
(16). self-reflection 自省
(17). self-awareness 自我覺察
(18). emotional well-being 情緒上的正面價值／健康；幸福感
(19). Foster (v.) 培養
(20). Mindset (n.) 思考的模式
結論
總結使用ChatGPT輔助寫作的狀況，可以用一句話概括：「方便，但產出千篇一律。」
目前Open AI的生成式能幫助人類：
1. 快速抓出書寫凌亂的短文的重點，並用沒有文法錯誤的語句表達出來。
2. 將重點概念重新整理成結構完整、行文流暢的文章，只是讀起來的機械味道相對濃厚。
3. 抓得到一些原本寫得非常模糊的用詞，並適當改寫成語意接近的同義詞，但學術味稍微濃厚。
4. 語句的句型相對簡單【單句；合句；動詞分詞減化用法→大概掌握高中難度的句子即可以流暢閱讀】
適合有心磨練寫作技巧的指引：
(1). 讓AI幫自己建構基本結構如下：
TS：主題句；一句話概括段落的文句
SSs：支持句；銜接主題，邏輯連貫的解釋性語句
CS：結論句；總收全段落，並呼應首句的語句
(2). 抓出原本模糊不清，或誤用的單詞；並替換成與之對應的用詞
(3). 建構沒有文法錯誤，或文法錯誤很少，句型結構簡單的語句；並用這些相對簡單的句子組成讓人閱讀起來流暢的作文。
附註（參考來源）
[1] 佳文編號1（大考中心）
https://www.ceec.edu.tw/files/file_pool/1/0O089342376665338022/%E5%8E%9F%E5%8D%B71.pdf
