113學測英文佳作選【AI輔助修稿測試】

概要

        過年期間，剛好Deepseek的新聞炒得沸沸湯湯。BBC態度相對保守，新聞標題將「革命」和「炒作」兩面並陳。[1]不論如何，台灣的公部門會限制使用這款生成式AI。[2]

        在Deepseek爭議塵埃落定之前，一些較沒爭議的功能，例如協助寫作訓練，是目前的AI技術可以協助人類的。在主流媒體，或自媒體，爭相吹捧，或撻伐Deepseek之際，現在最常被使用的ChatGPT已經可以協助寫作訓練了。經測試，其功用十分傑出。

        鑒於本平台討論學測英文已有一定量的內容，筆者想趁大考結束，與成績放榜前的這段空白時段，測試一下「AI具體而言如何協助自己精進寫作技巧。」

        本文會以大考中心公布的113年英文作文佳作[3]為範例，在不改變原文旨要的前提下，透過適當改寫，並將其輸入，讓AI逐步：一、抓出旨要(sorting out the main idea`/summarizing)；二、重整段落(rewriting the passage)； 三、抓出重點(breaking down into key points)；四、重組段落(incorporating the key points)；最後，五、簡短輸出(rendering a concise version)，以形成字數約60-70字（全文合計120-150字）容易消化的短文。作為測試之用，本文先以上段為例，將生成70個單詞以內，具有基本文章結構的短文。

原文

原文逐字稿[4]：

        【選文說明：並未經偏好或設定條件來挑選材料，純粹因編號第一而選擇。大考中心已經公布評分原則；筆者判斷不須再額外加入自己的評論。版權所有權歸大考中心；使用皆依照以下指示：在合理使用範圍內，以非營利目的，純粹為學術討論，在合理範圍內斟酌刪改。】

        The issue I want to tackle the most with my robot helper is the second one: caring what others think. First, during this *sensitive phase of teenagers’ lives, appearance anxiety is almost dreadful and usually comes from the uncertainty of how others perceive them. The insecurity grows as teenagers become keen on what others think, making their problems crucial and obvious. Second, excessive focus on others’ thoughts, which is out of teenagers’ control, could lead to the fear of showing personal traits. Because of the anxiety to be left out, teenagers tend to seek ‘expected social standards’ to fit in. However, meeting the expectations often requires teenagers to get rid of their *uniqueness, making the society *monotone and boring. Worse still, the desire to follow what others do might cultivate mob mentality and worsen bulling. In conclusion, the issue of caring what others think is my priority to solve due to its impact on appearance anxiety and erasing diversity.

[原文159字；*為拼寫錯誤]

AI處理

步驟一：抓出旨要(sorting out the main idea/summarizing)

具體步驟：

輸入「整理原文／概括原文」(sorting out the main idea of a certain passage/summarizing the passage)

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將原文輸入

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輸出成果，

如下：

The main idea of the passage is that the author wants to address the issue of teenagers caring too much about what others think. This concern leads to appearance anxiety, fear of expressing individuality, and a tendency to conform to social expectations, which can result in a lack of diversity and even encourage harmful behaviors like mob mentality and bullying.

步驟二：重寫段落(Rewriting the passage)

具體步驟：

請AI重寫原文(Can you rewrite the passage?)

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輸出成果，

如下：

The primary issue I want my robot helper to address is the tendency of teenagers to worry excessively about others' opinions. During this sensitive stage of life, appearance anxiety becomes a major concern, often fueled by uncertainty about how they are perceived. As teenagers become more self-conscious, their insecurities intensify, making their struggles feel overwhelming. Furthermore, an excessive focus on others’ thoughts—something beyond their control—can lead to a fear of expressing individuality. In an effort to fit in and avoid exclusion, many teenagers conform to societal expectations, often at the cost of their uniqueness. This conformity not only creates a monotonous society but can also contribute to harmful behaviors like mob mentality and bullying. Given these significant impacts, reducing teenagers’ concern about others’ opinions is my top priority.

◎ 簡評：AI生成的本段落顯然有點冗長，不易一眼掌握大要；需要進一步梳理出大致論點(key points)

步驟三：切割論點(Breaking down into several key points)

具體步驟：

請AI將段落分斷成數個主要論點(Can you break [down] this passage into several key points)：

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輸出成果，

如下：

Here are the key points of the passage:

1. Main Issue: The author wants to address teenagers' excessive concern about others' opinions.
2. Appearance Anxiety: Teenagers experience heightened self-consciousness, leading to insecurity about how they are perceived.
3. Fear of Expressing Individuality: Over-focusing on others' thoughts can cause teenagers to suppress their uniqueness in order to fit in.
4. Conformity and Social Expectations: The pressure to meet societal norms results in a lack of diversity, making society monotonous.
5. Negative Consequences: Conformity can encourage mob mentality and contribute to bullying.
6. Conclusion: The author prioritizes solving this issue due to its impact on mental well-being and social diversity.

步驟四：用上述的結構重寫短落(incorporating the key points)

具體步驟：

請AI用上述的主要論點重寫段落(Can you rewrite a new passage with the given key points above?)

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輸出成果，

如下：

One of the most pressing issues I want my robot helper to address is teenagers’ excessive concern about others’ opinions. During this critical stage of development, many teenagers struggle with appearance anxiety, feeling uncertain about how they are perceived by their peers. This insecurity often grows, making their self-doubt seem overwhelming. Additionally, a strong focus on external validation can lead to a fear of expressing individuality. Many teenagers, worried about being left out, conform to societal expectations at the expense of their uniqueness. This pressure to fit in not only results in a lack of diversity but also fosters a monotonous social environment. Worse still, blindly following social norms can encourage mob mentality and even contribute to bullying. Given these serious consequences, addressing teenagers’ preoccupation with others’ opinions is a top priority for my robot helper, as it directly impacts their confidence, mental well-being, and the richness of society. [149字]

◎ 簡評：仍然冗長，不易新手閱讀；需要進一步縮短。

步驟五：簡化輸出(rendering a concise version)

具體步驟：

請AI縮短(make it shorter)

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輸出成果，

如下：

My robot helper’s main goal is to reduce teenagers’ excessive concern about others’ opinions. Appearance anxiety often stems from insecurity about peer perception, making self-doubt overwhelming. Fear of rejection also pushes teenagers to conform, sacrificing their uniqueness and creating a monotonous society. Worse, this pressure can fuel mob mentality and bullying. By addressing this issue, my robot helper can promote confidence, individuality, and a more diverse social environment. [68字]

【筆者標註：粗體字為主體詞；底線為主題論述】

結論

       本文的目的在於分解筆者自己使用ChatGPT改寫短文的步驟；當作低成本的替代選項，適合有寫作問題，卻苦於缺乏指導者的人。有興趣的人可以自己嘗試看看。       

       於寫作練習上，ChatGPT 的AI確實是好用的工具；前提是明確知道自己的需求，並能用清晰的指令操作AI生成所需的段落。

        經測試，英文似乎是最容易下達指示的語言：幾乎沒有生成毫無意義的言詞；足見OpenAI在以英文為主要訓練語言的威力。

        AI很能生成「結構完整的文章，」儘管讀久了會讓人覺得呆板、千篇一律。不過，在訓練自己掌握段落組織的這個任務上，AI提供十足優異的協助。

備註

        當然，讀完這篇文章後，對使用AI協助寫作練習產生興趣的網友，歡迎在底下留言。看到的話，筆者會花一些時間消化問題，提出看法。

        日後會再上傳下段的改寫過程，並將兩段段落組成一篇獨立文章。有興趣的人也可以關注一下。感謝各位。

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註解

[1] DeepSeek異軍突起：AI「革命」還是「炒作」？（BBC中文）

https://www.bbc.com/zhongwen/articles/c0qw5y7208do/trad

[2] DeepSeek AI資安疑慮 數發部警示公部門限制使用（公視新聞）

https://news.pts.org.tw/article/735812

[3] 113學年度學科能力測驗英文作文佳作（大考中心）https://www.ceec.edu.tw/xmdoc/cont?xsmsid=0J071624926253508127&qbranch=0J071649374729510051&sid=0O089336014967309929

[4] 佳文編號1（大考中心）

https://www.ceec.edu.tw/files/file_pool/1/0O089342376665338022/%E5%8E%9F%E5%8D%B71.pdf